The story, very tentatively titled Smoke and Mirrors (I know, it's terribly original. Perhaps the one thing that John Green and I have in common as writers is that we both find titles kind of impossible), is going to be told through at least four different points of view, the four siblings of the Marks family, and will take place in London and in Bombay (cue research!!).
Here's the opening two pages; I hope you guys like it! Please let me know what you think of it so far.
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May 1878
London,
England
When
Josephine Marks entered her sisters’ bedchamber, bright sunlight was streaming
through both of the windows, in spite of the fact that every other window in
the house displayed the typical dreary London rain.
“Kate,”
she called, stepping through the doorframe and at once wishing she had not.
The
room – or, at least half the room, including the half that now blocked
Josephine’s path – looked rather as though it had been torn to pieces by an
overeager dog or a particularly violent windstorm. Books littered the wood
floors and hid the green, red and brown swirls of the Persian carpet. Clothes
had been taken out from one of the tall, carved wardrobes and dumped
unceremoniously onto one of the four-poster beds or thrown half-heartedly into
one of the many steamer trunks crowding the room. The other four-poster,
surrounded by a swath of uncluttered carpet, had things piled upon it as well,
but these books were left in orderly rows, and clothes was neatly folded into
an open steamer trunk at the foot of the bed. Those
neat stacks were greatly in contrast with the piles of hair ribbons and sashes
and bonnets that tumbled down from the bed opposite and spilt all across the
floor.
All
this was strewn about, and yet there was no sign of the two sixteen year
old girls who inhabited the room.
“Kate?”
Josephine said again, stepping carefully around an atlas, opened, of course, to
maps of India. “Kate, do come out from wherever it is you are hiding. Grandmamma
has been wanting you this last half hour.”
There
was still no response. Then again, Kate was well aware that an interview with
Grandmamma was sure to cause more than a few fireworks. But Josephine was not
about to retreat without what she had come for, so she changed tactics.
“Clara?”
Still
stepping over the things that Kate had thrown willy-nilly about the room,
Josephine looked behind an open wardrobe door and pulled aside the neatly
hanging curtains around Clara’s bed, but discovered no giggling sisters.
“Clara,
dearest, do please come out.”
But
of course, there was no reply from the neater and nearly always silent twin.
She had hoped that perhaps Clara could be prevailed upon to give up the game
first, but as always, the two were steadfastly together in whatever mischief
they were up to this time.
It
was then that Josephine tripped over a boot that had been left lying on the
ground. She almost fell herself, catching herself on the lid of a steamer
trunk, but she could clearly hear Kate giggling from wherever it was that she
was hiding.
“Katherine
Georgiana Marks, if you do not show yourself this instant, I shall tell Mamma
and you shall have to give up magic from now till Michaelmas.”
“Oh,
Josy, do be reasonable. It was just a bit of fun.”
I like it!
ReplyDeleteThere's things cautious-me would double-check, but you've got research planned, and you almost certainly have a better grasp of the history than me anyway, so never-mind.
No, I'm interested - what would you double-check? I do plan to do lots of research (research is fun!) but if there's something you notice now that I don't see, I'd love to hear what it is and fix it or do more research in that direction. :)
DeleteOoooOOOoooh! London! And magic! And siblings! Basically all my favourite things rolled into one - you've definitely got me intrigued ;) And GO CAITLIN for not going back to sleep as I would have! :D
ReplyDeleteIs it weird that I've wanted to write a book featuring identical twins since I was about thirteen? Yeah, that's probably weird.
DeleteAlso, this multiple pov thing means I will be forced to write from the perspective of at least one boy. Possibly two. LE GASP.
And yeah, I have gone back to sleep way too many times and regretted it! I couldn't do that with this one, though.