So here is the kissing scene from my manuscript A TERROR OF DARKNESS. Avar, a werewolf, has just helped chase off some Parisian guards who want to arrest Rose and, well, chop her head off (this is the Reign of Terror, after all). Enjoy!
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“You saved my life,” she breathed. He grinned at her.
“You seem so surprised.”
Rose could not stop herself smiling; her breaths became short, giddy
laughs. He was there, standing in front of her with that silly smirk on his
face, there, solid, real, when she thought she would never see him again.
“You came back.”
“I came back,” he repeated with a nod. “I-”
He broke off, dropping his eyes for a moment, and when he looked up again
he stepped in towards her, raising a hand to brush her tousled hair away from
her face.
“I finally found someone I could never run from,” he said.
Words Rose could not say caught in her throat, tangled in surprise and
wonder and something she could not define.
His hand, still resting gently against her cheek, tilted her face
towards his, and he kissed her.
At first, his lips were feather light and hesitant on hers, and for a
moment Rose was convinced that she had never woken from those fevered and
unattainable dreams. But no, it was real, beautiful in its impossibility, and
her hands found his shoulders, pulling him closer to her. The cold, tight
feeling that had lodged her chest after he had gone melted in an instant,
chased away by his hand at her waist, his fingers in her hair. Rose gave
herself up entirely to that moment, that kiss, letting everything else slide
away, except the thought that for once in her life someone needed her as much
as she needed him.
Avar pulled away, letting Rose catch her breath, but she felt even more
giddy with every fresh gasp of air. He looked guilty, but she could not stop
smiling, hardly able to believe the strange and wonderful thing that had just
happened.
“I’m sorry,” he said, “I should not have presumed – we are – different,
we cannot-”
Rose shook her head, silencing him.
“None of that matters,” she said, her face an inch from his. “Remember?
We are not so very different, you and I.”
And she reached up and kissed him again, his arms wrapping securely
around her. None of that mattered; their differences were imaginary, and no one
could tell her otherwise, not anymore, not ever, and especially not in that
quiet little alleyway, a deserted street at the heart of Paris. Just then, for
those silent, stolen moments, they were all that mattered, the only two players
in a perfect and precarious world of lovely dreams.
I love a kiss between two people who think they shouldn't kiss. And how it can dissolve the differences between them.
ReplyDeleteWell said, Kate. I agree!
DeleteThank you both! Yep, these two are pretty star-crossed, I suppose... I just love them. :)
DeleteI loved it! Beautifully written--really liked the "perfect and precarious world of lovely dreams." I loved the kiss set against the backdrop of supernatural elements and tension between the characters. Good luck! (entry #48)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much! I'm so glad you liked it. :)
DeleteI loved the setup to this ... her giddiness at seeing him after she thought she wouldn't is infectious! And the last line, I agree with Jenny, is particularly lovely.
ReplyDeleteThat line's my favorite... possibly in the whole manuscript. :P Thanks so much!
DeleteYour writing is very lyrical. Nice scene!
ReplyDeleteThank you, I'm glad you like it!
DeleteGlad to see this turns out how I wanted it to :)
ReplyDeleteOh but of course. ;)
DeleteLoved this! Especially the last couple of sentences. Really well-written and nicely paced. Great scene! --Saybe (Kissing Scene #23)
ReplyDeleteThanks so much! :)
DeleteOh, your writing is so PRETTY! Love this scene!
ReplyDeleteLarissa (#47)
Aw, thank you so much!
DeleteThis was absolutely, completely and undeniably SWOON WORTHY!!!! No wonder you're in the BSD already! Great stuff!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, that just made my day! :)
DeleteThere is something so hot about kissing when you shouldn't; so naughty and pleasurable when it's forbidden, or shouldn't be. Love the scene, and congrats on your original entry in BSD getting you into the agent round! The premise is really engaging!
ReplyDeleteVirginia #7
Haha, I suppose there is, yes! Thanks so much!
DeleteDefintiely swoon worthy! I completely loved this (and I liked your query and first 250 too). This is so well written and I already love your characters.
ReplyDeleteMy favorite lines were: "...beautiful in its impossibility" and "Just then, for those silent, stolen moments, they were all that mattered, the only two players in a perfect and precarious world of lovely dreams."
So very lovely! Congrats on getting in and I hope your entry does well in the agent round.
-Amber (#41)
My Kissing Scene
Thank you! Good luck in the agent round to you as well. :)
DeleteLovely, definitely earns the Swooning Award for most Romantic Kiss! Congrats on getting into the agent round, best of luck to you!
ReplyDeleteMelonie (kiss #29)
Thanks so much! Good luck to you as well!
DeleteNow that's romance! Makes me want my own " perfect and precarious world of lovely dreams" -- maybe sitting in a gorgeous (fin de siècle) French cafe, sipping coffee and reading the rest of this book. Thanks so much for posting.
ReplyDelete--Barb (#38)
Thank you so much! That sounds like a lovely afternoon. :)
DeleteI FINALLY FOUND SOMEONE I COULD NEVER RUN FROM?!?!?!?!?
ReplyDeleteKissing Judge Leigh Ann here to give you the SWOONING AWARD for most romantic kiss. Because....WOW.
THANK YOU SO MUCH YOU'RE THE BEST. ^_^
DeleteKissing Expert Kalen here to say: UGH BLAST THAT LEIGH ANN FOR GETTING HERE FIRST. I had to go and double check on the rules and make sure I'm allowed to double up on the SWOONING AWARD because I must second the motion that this is a romantic kiss like whoa, yo!
ReplyDeleteAnd I am back to give you the WRITE IN THE KISSER award too, because apparently I get to give another one of those and Pikachu, I CHOOSE YOU!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for both awards! I'm honorable mention only, but I appreciate both immensely nonetheless! :)
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